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tigriswolfHave you ever read something, took a step back, reread it, then said, "Wow, that's bad"? I just did and thought I'd share. I won't give the title or fandom, but here's the first sentence and only part of the fic I read:
Deep within the dreary bowels of the foul cavern, two figures embraced by shadows moved swiftly with unease, stumbling blindly without any source of light to aid them in their haste, seeming to feel that any would draw too much attention to themselves.
I gave up halfway through the sentence. I can't even.
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Date: 2012-01-13 04:52 pm (UTC)(no subject)
Date: 2012-01-13 09:12 pm (UTC)I like stumbling blindly without any source of light. Is there another way to stumble blindly?
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Date: 2012-01-13 09:32 pm (UTC)(no subject)
Date: 2012-01-13 04:52 pm (UTC)~blinks
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Date: 2012-01-13 09:13 pm (UTC)I know! It's awful.
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Date: 2012-01-13 04:53 pm (UTC)(no subject)
Date: 2012-01-13 09:13 pm (UTC)*hee*
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Date: 2012-01-13 04:54 pm (UTC)(no subject)
Date: 2012-01-13 09:13 pm (UTC)I just snagged it cause it's pretty.
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Date: 2012-01-13 05:40 pm (UTC)(no subject)
Date: 2012-01-13 09:14 pm (UTC)I actually do really like the internal rhyme in the very first prep. phrase. It's everything after that I can't handle.
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Date: 2012-01-14 12:49 am (UTC)I gave up right there....
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Date: 2012-01-14 05:15 pm (UTC)(no subject)
Date: 2012-01-14 02:03 pm (UTC)(no subject)
Date: 2012-01-14 05:16 pm (UTC)*props you back up*
It got worse from there. I did a quick glance and backed away, shuddering.
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Date: 2012-01-14 05:27 pm (UTC)I regret to say, this is bad, but has nothing on a paper I was forced to read for a writing class. Four words: psudo wolf-fox porn.
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Date: 2012-01-14 05:57 pm (UTC)(no subject)
Date: 2012-01-15 03:11 am (UTC)No, seriously, that passage was foul, not just the cavern!
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Date: 2012-01-17 03:04 am (UTC)